R. J. Hoffman

its me agin with sum more suggestions if you are going to actually use them. how about you delve into his thoughts a bit. is he angry for having a ...

interesting point volant. i agree, unless you incorperate his behavior into the plot i suggest having some one else tell the boy the story.

dude i see you used my advice on the terain and on the type of armor they used. awesom action scene well worth my time. We can expect great things ...

I remain firm with my first post. it is one thing if you are just bad at writing, but it is another if you are to lazy to write something ...

I agree with the others. connan is to young. there is no size comparison for the dragon. what is the motivation for the hunters to hate the dragons? overall though ...

i agree with doctor kitty. you might be able to improve it by changing the point of view to third person and giving names, but more than anything smooth out ...

good i deas for improvement keep it up man. you should watch the military channel sumtimes. some of it is on modern day stuff the other part is on historical. ...

Ah i see. i think you should develope an adition to this. its a great leed. you could probly branch any number of differently themed stories off of this. very ...

Ah i see. i think you should develope an adition to this. its a great leed. you could probly branch any number of differently themed stories off of this. very ...

I apologise Ayra but i have never even heard of that series before... well any ways as far as the spacing goes, this stupid thing wont keep my original format ...

Good poem right here. i like how it can have so many interpretations. a bit short though, do you intend it to be short?

Im sorry for being an A$$ but it does. What country? What kind of a ship? What prophecy? what are thier back grounds? what makes Falk into a pirate? What ...